Wednesday, 12 May 2010

feedback experiment 1

Hi all,

below is the feedback for experiment 1

General

On the whole a great effort. However there are some general comments that need to be addressed.

- the language of your blog should be english, marks have been deducted for not changing the language settings

- scan your drawings, do not take photos of them, adjust the scanned images in photoshop so they are straight, marks have been deducted for not doing this

- if you have lots of wild forms and shapes, giving them each a different texture, colour and or material renders the form making to just a collage. Collages are 2d, you are working in 3d.

Students

Jason
strength ?
weakness lack of understanding that the ground is solid

Garth
strength spatial changes of the upper level studio
weakness need to spend more time developing the underground studio, think about
manipulating the ground plane

Saskia
strength tension of revealing the obscured object
weakness the stair should allow you to experience the whole object especially from
underneath

Andrew
strength dynamic roof
weakness the upper level studio looks like misplaced furniture

Cathy Xu
strength great spiral staircase and form making
weakness underground studio has a pancake ceiling low flat and boring

Lingyu
strength the upper level studio tubular spaces are great but need to exaggerate
them more
weakness still largely an extrusion and under developed

Paul
strength some of the sections
weakness no way of seeing the design as a whole. It is not described.

Rennie
strength fantastic combination of building and landscape
weakness a little to many rooms

Christine
strength experimentation with form making is inventive especially the stairs
weakness too many objects that do not need to be there distract the overall harmony

Seth
strength complexity
weakness complexity

Luke
strength compositionally striking
weakness colour combination. Is this a beautiful colour combination

Linda
strength the spatial variety in the upper level studio
weakness animation needs to illustrate spatial experience

Will
strength persistence with pursuing one idea
weakness the execution of this idea

Arean
strength the cavelike nature of the underground studio
weakness both the gallery and the upper level studio are very undeveloped

Sharryn
strength spatial composition
weakness some of the materials contradict the forms, some of the forms contradict
the desired use of natural light

Terrance
strength the simplicity has an elegance to it
weakness understanding that the earth is solid, lack of materiality of the upper level studio

Nicon
strength dynamic form of the upper level studio
weakness the lower level studio is an inferior version of your section. why?

Jessica
strength clear forms
weakness animations are not acceptable

Patricia
strength the stairs and the inventiveness of the forms
weakness too many materials and textures

Yuan
strength overall complexity of the forms
weakness spatially not much better than an office building

Geoff
strength dynamic roof
weakness studio is a left over platform, no interaction with the ground, underground studio a
shoebox with a skylight

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