below is the feedback for experiment 2. There are some general comments that you should take notice of for experiment 3
The assessment criteria is carefully stipulated. However in order to fully judge the architecture we must enter your environment and walk around.
It is possible to design everything from the editor but you should be going into the game to understand 'real time'.
The major difference between sketchup and crysis is that in crysis you can experience the environment in the first person, ie as a participant and not just as an observer.
A lot of the environments I went into were unnavigable, some I would fall off the platform into the sea below and not be able to climb back up the hill. Place the position in the editor that you want me to enter the environment. Draw a diagram showing how one moves through the environment. Draw a diagram or mark up images of the environment explaining where each of the labs are. Make it easy for me to understand.
Files : do not upload separate files with separate links to filefront. Package it all together so that I only have to download 1 folder. In that folder have 2 separate folders called objects and levels.
Only place the current level and objects / textures that you need to make it work.
Check that your download works so that you are sure that I can enter your environment.
The last experiment is handed in after the last tute. So if it doesn't work I won't be able to tell you.
strength : the framed view from the darwin lab, the landscape is enticing
weakness : textures seem random, placement in the landscape, why there?
strength : the spatial complexity of the 'ice house'
weakness : too many objects, try placing the 'ice house' on the top of the hill
strength : the use of a subtractive volume to create spaces - meeting place
weakness : use the drama of the landscape to create memorable setting / environment
strength : dramatic positioning of object in the landscape, heroic modernist image
weakness : the object needs to grow out of the mountain
strength : two worlds created on either side of the object allows for distinctive spaces
weakness : the lighted labs only work at night, such a gimmick makes it hard to navigate,
think about lighting the landscape if you what a night scene
strength : positioned beautifully in the landscape and a stunning landscape at that
weakness : perhaps the path to find the object could be more obscured and therefore
strength : use of texture, the cave looking out to the horizon
weakness : unfinished work, no link to files
strength : the logic of the 3 rooms, extremely well planned, excellent use of diagrams to
explain your ideas
weakness : the landscape is not as well crafted as some others, should have textures
strength : thoughtful placement and design of the labs
weakness : the texture of the landscape should have more life, difficult to navigate
strength : landscape is dramatic
weakness : the platforms cut out the foreground meaning that it is difficult to see the landscape
below, which was the point.
strength : axonometrics are nicely drawn
weakness : the building is 'plonked' on the landscape
strength : formation of the landscape, which has fantastic potential
weakness : didn't use the landscape to enhance the design, technical issues with crysis
strength : thought process, ideas, landscape
weakness : the thinness of the object and the large openings ie just platforms not really rooms
strength : the forms of the object mimic the background landscape well, which makes the
object seem inspired by the landscape and therefore belongs
weakness : the form needs to be adjusted so that it grows out of the landscape
strength : axonometrics and textures are beautifully drawn
weakness : is the position of the object indelibly linked to the landscape? Technical issues
strength : excellent extra effort, animation and directing how one should use the environment.
The use of texture.
weakness : the animation is repetitive, needs editing
strength : strong brutalist architecture yet simple. The towers mimic the landscape well
weakness : the horizontal platform needs to do something more than what it does. Eg.
cantilever it off the cliff to add to the drama of walking along it.
strength : very beautiful axonometrics
weakness : the position of the object in the landscape is not making the most out of the fact that
you got to design the landscape as well
strength : axonometrics
weakness : object is 'plonked' on the landscape.
strength : textures and landscape are well crafted
weakness : the object is 'plonked' on the landscape, could be anywhere, looks out of place
strength : spatial complexity of the object
weakness : the object needs to be anchored to the landscape, think more about how it sits in